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Post by Lauren is my Hero on Jul 5, 2007 13:53:18 GMT -5
Chapter 1 It is 8:00 on Tuesday at the Danes. Susan is in her room working her voice studies; Allie is asking her mom if she can go out with her boy friend Chris, Ben is in the Diner with his Dad helping him close up. Tara and Angelica are in their room watching Sponge Bob. Jake is then Kitchen with his mom and his sister Tracy. “Ugh mom this is really not fair Chris is waiting for me at his house why can’t I go out with him” Yells 16year old Allie at her mom coming down the hallway. “Because you are 16 years old and it is a school night I know you are the mini me, but I just cannot let you got out on a school night when you have to do your homework, which better be done by 10.” Said Lorelai “ What’s Going on out here” Susan asks as she comes out into the hallway were she find her mother and sister fighting as they usually do. Jake starts to cry “Jake what’s wrong” ask Susan as she finds him and Tracy in the Kitchen. “I want mommy she was done giving us the cookies she had made for us “whined Jake “I’ll help you guys let me just see if Tara and Angelica want any I will be right back.” Said Susan goes to see if her sisters want any cookies. “ Girls “said Susan as she knocks on the door to her little sister’s room. “Hey Girls” Susan says again. “Mom were are Tara and Angelica? “ she asks. “I really Thought that they were in their room” said Lorelai. Luke come into the room and says eh got a call from the Hospital and that they said that Tara and Angelica weer hit by a car on their home from school. “Oh my god are they ok please tell that are ok because if they are not ok I will never forgive myself” said Lorelai. “ I believe they are fine their cousin Rory saw them and took to the Hospital” Luke Said. “I think we should get down there” said Susan. “ Mom you really cannot how to me what to do with my life I mean Its my life I should be able to live it the way I want to.” Said Allie “Alison Marie Danes you are 16 years old and you cannot talk to me like that” Lorelai said as she came down the hall into Allie’s room. “Luke we can put Allie in charge and Susan wants to come with us” says Lorelai “ I know Ben can watch Jake and Tracy I mean he has watched them before” said Luke they walk down stairs where they find the rest of the kids sitting at the kitchen table . “Your sisters were hit by a car on their way home from school today we are going to the Hospital , to see them and bring them home Ben you are in charge and make sure Allie stays In her room, she is Grounded yet again” said Lorelai. They walked out eh door when they saw Amy Lorelai’s twin sister and Rory’s mother “ Are you guys going to the Hospital to see the girls” Amy asked “ Yes would you like to come with us to see the girls and pick up Rory” End of chapter1
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Post by iloveluke321 on Jul 5, 2007 19:34:06 GMT -5
ohh yeah, I read this on ff.net. I like it so far. And I totally don't mind if you get some ideas from my story. Its fine by me. I have one helpful suggestion for you that I also noticed you did when you posted it on ff.net too, try and put spaces between the lines so that its easier to read.
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Post by iloveluke321 on Jul 5, 2007 19:34:32 GMT -5
Well yeah that would have been crazy, but my story doesn't follow the show, and she had Rory at 18 and then they just kept having kids, I wrote all that in the beginning of the story, and yeah its crazy but oh well. lol. Oh ok...didn't read that part! Great story. Thanks!
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Post by iloveluke321 on Jul 5, 2007 19:36:41 GMT -5
Chapter 8:
“Well I uh…” Luke starts to say and rubs the back of his neck. “Geez, this is hard to say so I’ll just say it. I went to the doctor yesterday.” He says nervously.
Lorelai gives him a confused look, not understanding where exactly he’s going with this.
“Alright, so you went to the doctor…for what exactly?”
Luke sighs and leans up against the kitchen counter. “I was having these headaches, they kept getting worse…I just remember my dad when he found out he was sick with cancer, so I didn’t want to take any chances. I went to the doctor yesterday and-“ Lorelai cuts him off.
“You…you..have cancer?” She asks softly.
“I’m not sure yet, they ran some tests at the hospital and are going to call me back sometime this week. It could just be a tumor that’s not cancerous, or it could be cancer. Or it could just be a bad headache. I just don’t want you to worry.”
“Not worry! How am I not supposed to worry! How could you not tell me, I would have been there with you.” She says, pacing back and forth.
He puts his hands on her shoulder to calm her down and looks into her eyes, which look like they could let tears go at any minute. “I know you would have been there, but I didn’t want you there. I needed to go by myself, I’m sorry I didn’t tell you.” He says, in a calming voice so that it calms her down, even though inside Luke is freaking out too. He doesn’t want cancer. He has Lorelai, and 12 kids to worry about, and the diner. He can’t leave all that.
Lorelai takes a deep breath and then slowly lets it out. Then she looks at him and starts shaking her head. “No, you don’t have cancer, you won’t have cancer. The doctors screwed up. You aren’t sick and you never will be.” She says, going into denial about the whole thing and leaves the kitchen, wiping her eyes. 12 year old Jackie bumps into her mom.
“Mom, what’s wrong? Are you okay?” Jackie asks her mom. Lorelai puts on a fake smile for her daughter.
“Yes sweetie I’m fine…just got something in my eye that’s all.”
“Okay, then can I go do my homework in the kitchen?”
“Oh yeah…uh…sure no problem.” Lorelai says quickly and then rushes upstairs.
Luke follows right behind her once he sees she is heading for their room to lock the door.
“Lorelai wait, we need to talk about this.”
She turns around to face him. “There’s nothing to talk about.”
Luke sighs. “Yes there is, come on, I’m scared too, but we need to talk.”
“I don’t want to talk Luke, everything is fine. You’re fine, I’m fine and all the kids are fine….everything is just,”
Luke cuts her off. “Fine.”
“Yes, fine, now please let me go.” She begs him; his hand is on her arm because he didn’t want her to run from him.
“And what are you going to do Lorelai, pack your bags again and leave for another business trip the minute things get hard around here!” Luke snaps at him and Lorelai pulls her arm away from him and glares at him.
“I can’t believe you just said that.”
“Well the truth hurts!”
“That was last year Luke! And I wasn’t running away, it was business!”
“Psst, yeah right,” He scoffs. “We get into a fight, the next day you say you get this business offer. You were gone for a year!” He throws that in her face too.
“It was business Luke!”
“Whatever, what did you do while you were in London huh? Get as many guys as you wanted since you were away from your family!” Luke yells at her, and her face softens. They have never really talked about anything since Lorelai got home from that trip a few months ago, so this fight was a long time coming.
Lorelai’s face softens; feeling like Luke just punched her in the stomach. She gives him a look and then walks into their bedroom, slamming the door in his face.
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Post by Lauren is my Hero on Jul 5, 2007 20:25:11 GMT -5
aw sad cahpter but i love it weer you the ioen who left me a review on ff.net
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Post by iloveluke321 on Jul 5, 2007 20:35:20 GMT -5
Oh idk, I didn't think I reviewed yours, but I might have. what was the username on there. because I have a different name on ff.net then I do on here.
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Post by Lauren is my Hero on Jul 6, 2007 8:22:30 GMT -5
Gilmoregrl519
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Post by Lauren is my Hero on Jul 6, 2007 9:29:16 GMT -5
Chapter 2
“Yes I would love to come with you guys” Amy said
They walk down the street toward the Hospital when they get to hospital they see the girls with castes arms. “What happened to you three” said Susan. Mean while back at the Danes house Ben, Jake, and Tracy are in the kitchen eating the cookies. “I wonder if Allie wants a cookies I am going to ask her” said Ben
Ben Knocks on Allie’s Door “Allie its Ben do you want cookies” said Ben no answer
Ben walks into his sister’s room and realizes that she is not there and that she went out. “Jake and Tracy Allie went put her bedroom window I am going to be so much trouble with mom and dad. Luke, Lorelai, Angelica, Tara, Susan, Rory and Amy come into the house. “I’m am going to cheek on Allie and say I am sorry about what I said today” said Lorelai “Mom wait Allie is out I went up there to se if she wanted any cookies and she was not there” said Ben “I told her not to go out with her boy friend Chris tonight” said Lorelai “I am going out to look for her and bring her back” said Luke “I am going to cal her and see if it was an emergency “said Lorelai
Allie then walks in the front door “Alison Marie Danes Kitchen now” said lorelai “ Mom you were being unfair and I just wanted to see” said Allie “I did not think that you and dad were going to be home yet” she said “Mom I was going to get the girls ready for bed” said Susan “Jake, Ben, and Tracy go up stairs” said Lorelai “Allie how could you do this yet again I mean you just go off of being grounded” her mother said “I am going upstairs with Susan and the kids handle this and then come up” said Luke “Ok Hun I will be up in a few” said Lorelai “Mom this is really unfair to punish me when you did the same thing with dad when you were younger did Grandma and Grandpa do this to you “said Allie “No but maybe they should have” her mother said “Mom don’t go easy on here this time I mean this is what the third ngiht this week that this has happed” Susan says from up stairs “ I know that this the third night that this has happened that this has happened” Lorelai said “You are grounded for now until I saw that you are not, and you only allowed to go to Guys and Dolls to Susan play Sarah Brown” her mother said “Ok Fine “Allie said “Luke I Went to the doctors today on my lunch break from the Inn” Lorelai said “And “ Luyke said “We are going to have another daughter in nine months”
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Post by Lauren is my Hero on Jul 6, 2007 9:59:36 GMT -5
Sarah walks into the door she has been at her freinds " Hi mom and Dad" seh says gogign into the Bathroom were Susanis givng the Girls a bth " ehy what happedn to theior arms she asas" " Do you remeber our cosuin Jess" susan Asks " Of Course I do she sasy" " Well hes back in town and he hit the Grils with his Car on ther way hoem from school" " That's so mean" sarah says
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Post by reply on Jul 6, 2007 10:07:12 GMT -5
Nope, wasn't me. Sorry that I didn't review it on ff.net. I did read it though.
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Post by iloveluke321 on Jul 8, 2007 21:18:33 GMT -5
Nope, wasn't me. Sorry that I didn't review it on ff.net. I did read it though. Woops, I forgot to log in when I responded to that. But nope thats not me.
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Post by iloveluke321 on Jul 9, 2007 21:19:31 GMT -5
Chapter 9
As the door slams in his face Luke rubs his hand through his hair and slams his fits against the wall.
“Dammit!” He yells, and then turns away from the wall and goes downstairs to start making dinner.
Lorelai is sitting on her bed, staring at the ground and taking in all of what was just said. She can’t believe that he might have cancer; she can’t believe that he would think she’d cheat on him while she was in London last year…..
Flashback…
All the kids are at school, except for Justin, who is napping. Lorelai and Luke had both been home during the afternoon and that’s when Lorelai really needed to talk to him.
“Luke, I have something to tell you.”
“What is it?” He asks, both of them having a seat on the couch.
“A man called the Inn this morning and said they are interested in my services in other places around the world. I’d get to travel and tell people how to run an inn the best way, isn’t this exciting.”
Luke sits there, taking this all in.
“How long will you be gone for?”
“A few months, that’s it.”
“And this is really what you want to do?”
“Yes, it really is.”
“Well what about the kids? You are just going to leave them behind.”
“It’s only for a few months Luke.”
“Lorelai, Justin is only two, you can’t just take off and leave.” Lorelai is a taken back, she thought Luke would be happy for her.
“I know, I know, and I feel really bad for leaving. But this is a great opportunity for me.”
After thinking about it for a few minutes he says, “Lorelai, don’t go, you’ll regret it.”
“You really don’t want me to go, do you?” She asks softly and looking into his eyes.
He shakes his head. “I really don’t.”
She sighs. “Alright…then I won’t go.”
Lorelai isn’t happy about this, but if Luke doesn’t want her to go, then she won’t go.
Later on that night……Luke and Lorelai were fighting all night over the littlest things. Every so often she’d throw it in his face that she could just leave at any time she wanted…..thats the argument they were having right now.
“Why do you want to go away so badly! Is it really because you want to!” Luke yells at her.
“No! I want to go so I can get away from you!” She screams at him, throws the dish towel at him and goes upstairs to pack…the next morning all the kids are outside on the front porch saying goodbye to each other.
“Just go Lorelai.” He says coldly. She looks up at him and gives him a nasty look.
“I’m going.” She says with attitude back at him….and those were the last words they said to each other until she had gotten back, they may have talked on the phone once or twice, but other than that she would just talk to the kids.
Lorelai thought they had made up, but now the yelling was back. But this time….she wasn’t going anywhere.
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Post by Lauren is my Hero on Jul 11, 2007 18:42:25 GMT -5
good chapter
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Post by iloveluke321 on Jul 11, 2007 23:16:57 GMT -5
thanks.
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Post by Lauren is my Hero on Sept 8, 2007 9:25:40 GMT -5
Luke and Lorelai life and Kids chapter 4
Lorelai came into the bath and said” ok kid’s time to go to bed”
All the girls said “ok mom see you in the morning”
Lorelai goes into her room and Get in bed with Luke “ hey all the kids in bed?’ he says
Susan is the first one up the morning” Mom and Dad we have a huge problem!” Lorelai and Luke both get up and run into all the kids rooms cheeking to make sure that they all there. “ Luke Allie is not here and we all know were she is “says Lorelai “at her boy friends house” every one says together
They call her boy friend and discover she was not there.
They then called Allie’s Aunt Amy and her cousin Rory and they said that allie said they her parents had kicked her out” said Amy “Why would she say some thing like that I cannot believe her” said Lorelai
Allie got on the phone and said “ I just don’t fit in at that house no one else is like me There” Susan Lorelai says “ get all the kids ready for school ,and have Jake and Tracy come down, and I will tell them they are coming to work with me”
“Ok mom” Susan says
Jake and Tracy come down the steps, and they say together” good morning mommy”
Susan, Ben, Sarah, Angelica, and Tara all come down with their stuff for school. “Kids come to the Inn after school and we will come home together
During school Aliie sees Susan and she dsoe not even say Hi to her
After school Susan goes to the inn and meets her Brothers and Sisters ther. “Ok guys now its time to go home says Lorelai”:
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